.// Beta-Checking (ongoing)

[Jenn]

Name: Jenn
Player Thread: Thread Here

Error: Under Naming, "All male's names contain and 'n'" should be "an 'n'" - also, male's should probably be males' and likewise female's should be females' (you may want to check this on other provinces' naming, too)
Page Url: www.planetzar.com/prov-anygh.html

[Kitty Love]

Name: Kitty
Player Thread: euclidestheatre.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=cdkitty&action=display&thread=1507

These are all on the same page so I hope it's ok for them to be in one post.

Error:
In Terra's description, last paragraph under Art & Architecture

'Street performances to occur on occasion,'
should be 'do'
and, same sentence,
'as they are thought of to be distasteful.'
of doesn't belong
Sentence after it
'they’d be hire proper and'
properly hired, maybe?

Under Occupations:
(Perfumer's)
'and guild master, who give out tasks'
should be gives

'guild master who gives out tasks and hold competitions' should be holds

Not sure if this is an error or not, but under naming, the original Amuni naming rules are missing.

Page Url: www.planetzar.com/prov-terra.html

[Kitty Love]

Name: Kitty
Player Thread: euclidestheatre.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=cdkitty&action=display&thread=1507

Error:
Sultherem, under Art, beginning of second paragraph.

'tends to be delicately colors,'
Should be 'delicate'

Architecture, end of First paragraph
'a simply opening of the windows'
should be 'simple'

Architecture, end of fourth paragraph.
'more well thought of an attractive the man. '
Should be 'and'

Architecture, beginning of last paragraph
'Architecture in Sultherem is some of the finest known Izarn,'
'known to Izarn' ?

same sentence

'is not important to the Sultheren when considered décor.'
considering

Architecture, last sentence
'or amber colors houses'
colored

Page Url: www.planetzar.com/prov-sultherem.html

[Jenn]

Name: Jenn
Player Thread: Thread Here

Error: "If you character has made" - "people travel on the time" - "attack from a dangerous wild animals"
Page Url: F.A.Q.

[Jenn]

Name: Jenn
Player Thread: Thread Here

Error: "All requests and replies must include and in-character" should be "an in-character" (and I think this is in most shops)
Also, a size tag at the end
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[Jenn]

Name: Jenn
Player Thread: Thread Here

Error: says the defore," We've got all sorts --> should have a period and a space after defore, and no space before We've
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[Kari Muffin]

Name: Kari Muffin
Player Thread: Thread Here

Error: 2nd Post, under Post #3 Trackers "ans well as" should be "as well as"

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[Kitty Love]

Name: Kitty
Player Thread: euclidestheatre.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=cdkitty&action=display&thread=1507

Error:
Turacha, Government, par 4
group of warlords (which may be may be any gender)
Hello repeat =3

'The Rachi also act and judge and jury'
And = as

Art, par 1
'prefer multi-dimensional art work, than those created'
either rather than or just nix than and put in over

Architecture, Par 3
'The air exits normally, and created a notably'
created should be creates

Naming
'Names are also occur in the formula'
are should be must

Page Url: www.planetzar.com/prov-turacha.html

[iprince]

All edits up to this point are complete[/u]

Jenn: Your total from this batch should be 9 PP.

Kitty: Your total from this batch should be 16 PP.

Kari: Your total from this batch should be 1 PP.

=3 Thank-you guys so much for helping out.

[aurryinne]

Name: Rynnie
Player Thread: euclidestheatre.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=cdrynone&action=display&thread=1506

Error:

Required Reading

While...you can read up on extra documents as the information becomes relevant or required to you.

Relevant to you? Or required for you? Which?

Once you've read...feel your well enough acquainted with Izarn to want to play

You are? You're? Rather than your? Is phrasing that "well-acquainted enough" instead clearer than well enough acquainted?

In the mean time...

Comma?

All players start off with a single playable LC...You can get new characters by...

Would starting a new paragraph before you answer make the answer to the question clearer?

You can also obtains “bebes” of each species through breeding and breeding tickets.

Obtain? No s?

These create a more realistic and detailed game play, and gives each individual character something to work towards.

Give? No s?

Points are...such as growth from one stage to the next, abilities, rank increases, and more!

Would a verb be better than a noun?

Last we have the character aspects of prestige and stats.

Comma?

One more thing... (I'm not sure this is an errors, per se, but...)

you can...and participate in any games or events that are currently in progress...Once this is finished
you'll be free to start role-playing and you can participate in IC games and events

This sentence confused me when I read down further, and found another reference to participating in games and events,
until I reached the section on game tokens, and realised that there were OOC games and events, as well as IC games and
events.

Page URL: www.planetzar.com/h-join

[Spiderfly]

Name: Spiderfly
Player Thread: euclidestheatre.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=cdspiderfly&action=display&thread=1487

Error: under herbs;
"Herbs aren't the tastiest foods around by any means, and no familiar will be too happy about being fed one, but that have some interested effects. Herbs must be used on familiar's preparing to, or planning on, breeding. "

but they have some interesting effects.
familiar's should be familiars
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[Spiderfly]

Name: Spiderfly
Player Thread: euclidestheatre.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=cdspiderfly&action=display&thread=1487

Error: within "our ad" coding
2nd chunk of code in both HTML and UBBC - "opitional" should be optional
in UBBC - [b][u]Our Setting[/b][/u] [ul] should be [b][u]Our Setting[/u][/b][ul] or else the [ / u ] shows
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[Spiderfly]

Name: Spiderfly
Player Thread: euclidestheatre.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=cdspiderfly&action=display&thread=1487

Error:
2nd par- "what they heck are those?" should be what the heck are those?
"Once a number is chosen, that prize is gone, and that particular slot in the machine, empty." should be "machine is empty."


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[Spiderfly]

Name: Spiderfly
Player Thread: euclidestheatre.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=cdspiderfly&action=display&thread=1487

Error:
1st par-, "It's not a large building, by the paint is bright and cheery and the atmosphere seems inviting." should be "but the paint..."
1st par-, "pleasently" should be pleasantly


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[Spiderfly]

Name: Spiderfly
Player Thread: euclidestheatre.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=cdspiderfly&action=display&thread=1487

Error:
under esstur berry. Inciting should be Enticing (edit fail! XD Thanks Jenn)
under Driasran Nut- except should be expect

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